Good job hermiony the only thing I saw was spelling errors or I never herd of this word before "Mercury, Venus, Mars, Io and other" other than that good job. :)
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Mr. Hong
12/14/2011 01:15:59 pm
I would recommend using more 'TRANSITION' words in all of your paragraphs. As well, you should make sure that you are only using your own words.
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Amy
12/14/2011 02:34:16 pm
Crust
- Continents does not need a capital(second sentance)
- Great job overall
Mantle
- You could use simpliar words so it is easier to understand
- Wonderful page
Outer Core
- You shouldn't use the exact number even though it is helpful
- Great page
Inner Call
- In the first sentance intermost is two words like "inter most"
- fabulous job overall
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Mickey Mouse
12/15/2011 01:14:52 am
Hi Hermonie!
Crust- For your crust you have to put it in your own words because these are some words that I don’t know what it means and other people will probably wont know what it is so one of the words that I didn’t understand was (consist) and the word (Incompatible)
Mantle- your mantle was a bit better but you have to put it in your own words and get more information
Outer Core- You need more information and one of the words that I didn’t understand was (Viscosity)
Inner Core- Try to not use words that people wont know what it means.
But over all great job and I really like your website! ☺
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Hi my name is Hermonie and i am a grade 6 student.
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